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全程指导: 故事线与选材

选材和故事线(二)——案例精析二

全程指导: 故事线与选材

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二.关于“转专业”那点事儿

站在录取官的角度想想事儿:

1.     以前的专业你有哪些成就?为什么你不打算继续读下去?

2.     如何发现了新的方向?你在新的领域有哪些积累和思考?

3.     你如何证明你将来能胜任新的专业学习和行业要求?可转换知识和技巧?新的积累?

4.     未来学业规划?职业规划?选校原因?

5.     结尾

 

申请方向——**大学石油工程与能源工程

过去经历:Confusion

·      追求真理,永远疑问——自己的科学信仰

·      由对数学,物理和哲学的热爱,从而本科和研究生选择**专业,并表现卓越

·      然而,国内学术环境不尽如意,并逐渐明白自己想投身于有直接贡献且应用性更强的领域。

石油工业之路:New Path

·      和父亲的谈话逐渐了解能源工业,并从该领域对社会政经的影响力和现实挑战出发,陈述自己投身石油工业的思考。

·      由热忱指引,自己在新领域的学习和积累:读书,修课,实习,海外学习计划

·      并谈及研究生教育和选校理由——为什么斯坦福大学是“我”的首选。

我的能力: My Ability

·      五项优点——为什么我会是出色的学生和工程师

·      正面研究经历缺乏的软肋,现在在进行的研究和未来计划

我的计划 My Plan

·      我的学习,实习及参与工程项目的计划

·      如何利用好学校资源

结尾 Closure

 

Statement of Purpose

I am applying for admission to the Master’s program of ... of ... with the aim of pursuing a career as a .... With a bachelor’s degree in Physics, I am currently a third-year graduate student in the Master’s program in ... —one of the best universities in China. 直奔主题,表明申请学位和具体方向,

PAST EXPERIENCE

Ancient Greek Scholars desire to pursue the truth and always wonder; so do I. In high school, I exclaimed at how great ideas human minds can conceive when I first learned Peano’s axioms of natural number and the idea of topology. I was shocked at how wonderful this world was when I first learned some concepts in quantum mechanics. I deemed Mathematics, Physics and Philosophy as the most brilliant intellectual achievements made by mankind.

This restless ambition motivated me to choose Mathematics and Physics as my undergraduate major, and History of Science in my graduate study. (非常好的过渡!承接上文提到的对人类科学成果的着迷和立志寻求真理贡献社会的雄心,引出对本科和研究生专业的选择和学术表现。)Throughout my educational experiences, I have always been in the best and somewhat idealistic places: ... and ... and .... What I earned reflects my resolute effort: First prize in National Physics Olympiad Final Match, training & selection program for IPhO (International Physics Olympiad), major GPA as high as 3.9 and 10 full-marks in my undergraduate study, et cetera.

This ambition further led me to the MS program in history of science (one can see a transition of interest from my undergraduate transcript), in which I enjoyed various philosophical reflections on science. However, the loose atmosphere in our philosophy department disappointed me and induced my confusion: Pure philosophical reflection has little applicability in today's society, but I want to do something practical, something that is beneficial to all of mankind. Thus, during this transition period, I kept looking for a career path which I am willing to devote myself to.

WAY TO THE PETROLEUM INDUSTRY

Meanwhile, I happened to know about the energy industry through some discussions with my father (He is a civil engineer), as he was conducting research on energy issues. Gradually, a clear interest and aspiration in the petroleum industry has formed: The energy industry plays a crucial role in modern politics, economics and society. Fossil fuels would still be the predominant of all energy resources in the foreseeable future, among which, the petroleum industry needs the most comprehensive technology and largest cooperation. Moreover, many progresses in green energy (Unconventional Hydrocarbon, CO2 Sequestration, etc.) are also born in Petroleum Companies. These reasons have led me to decide to choose the petroleum industry as my future career, and I am ready for any and all challenges. (对行业确实有深入的研究和思考)

I made efforts in learning about the petroleum industry, and read the literature extensively. I did internships with China National Petroleum Corporation and TOTAL(CHINA) this summer in Beijing. This semester, I decided to apply for overseas study, and to take all ... courses at ... University: ..., ..., ..., etc. (由对新方向的热忱,引出自己不仅纸上谈兵,还做了一系列的实践和努力:读书,选课,实习,未来交流计划,让录取官感受到你对新的专业不是三分钟热度,而是深思熟虑并且付诸行动的选择。)

As to my consideration for my future oversea studies, I highly value the positive and supportive atmosphere in the ... department at .... Unlike the loose situation of my current department, the ... department of ... has such a great study environment that extensive communication exists among faculties and students. One can hardly found its equivalence in China. This makes ... my first choice. (如果你把该校列为你的首选并在文书中指出,往往也会得到该校录取官更多的青睐。)

ON MY ABILITIES

I want to list several points in regards to my potentials and abilities. 1. Fast learning due to my science and philosophy background; 2. Good at solving problems, which is reflected by my undergraduate major GPA; 3. Passionate in doing practical work that is needed by others; 4. Finishing assignments timely and with greater caution, thus always making fewer errors than others. 5. Good at gaining abilities through concrete work--I had once established the whole production workflow of a video show program nearly out of scratch and solved all technical problems, only relying on my past film editing experience. These qualities could be further confirmed by my past employers and project supervisors (Refer to my resume). (这五点作者都是想证明自身治学严谨,未来能够顺利完成学业并取得优异成绩。可圈可点之处是作者几乎每个点都有佐证而不是假大空,用1, 2, 3, 4, 5罗列自己的优势,非常清晰,值得借鉴!)

This semester, I just started to do some preliminary project, and I independently wrote a successful Black Oil Reservoir Simulator on MATLAB. And I plan to do some research next semester. Although I do not have much research experience in PE up to now, I believe that an inner drive to do something empirical, with an ideal to make it better based on the past, combined with a strong science background will definitely make me a competitive student and engineer. (非常诚实正面地说明自己确无石油工程领域的研究经历,但是以自身的动力和科学背景一定会成为出色的学生和工程师。主动解释且诚恳真挚,把减分项扭转成加分项了。不得不让人佩服作者的全面和优秀。)

MY PLAN DURING GRADUATE STUDY

I am pursuing an M.S. program, through which I can take some fundamental courses first to develop my background for a petroleum engineer. Meanwhile, I will start to do some research and/or projects on certain specific issues like unconventional hydrocarbon simulation. During vacations, I will consider doing some internship in petroleum related companies, so that I could consider my career path with better understanding. However, that doesn’t mean that I would have a careless attitude in the study period. Far from that, I am fully confident that I can excel in my coursework, research project, and industrial project, etc.(总结很关键,积极,乐观,自信的态度会大大加大你的录取筹码。)

If admitted, I will take reservoir simulation as my subfield and I would like to work closely with Professor .... It would be a perfect platform for me. However, due to my great admiration of ..., other areas related to reservoir engineering are also desirable for me as long as it suits my background of Mathematics & Physics. For example, Professor ...'s research is also of particular interest to me. (陈述自己对学院资源的了解,展示了你就读的决心和未来利用资源发展自己的能力。)

FINAL REMARK

Nothing can efface aspirations. For me, my persistent ambition gradually evolved into a practical one. It constantly gives me faith, hope, and love towards what I choose to pursue in the rest of my life -- to make my best contribution to the energy industry.

总结全文自己如何从哲学领域转到应用性更强的石油工程专业,呼应开头自己的科学信仰,重申为能源工业做出贡献的抱负。

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